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2013年6月英语四级写作分析以及范文(文都版)

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          第二段:观点讨论
          Does anyone claim the same attitude towards this issue?Definitely not,actually,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain that the doing some big is beneficial to students.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that the doing some big is detrimental to the youngsters, and they think that the merits of students’ doing some small things far outweigh its demerits.To my way of thinking,we should know the the importance that why we must do small things before we undertake something big. If we know the significance,we will choice the right way and do the right things。
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          Does anyone maintain/claim the same attitude towards this issue/phenomenon? Definitely not,actually/in fact,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain/argue/hold/claim that something is beneficial to sth.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that something is detrimental to sth .The demerits/disadvantages of sth. far outweigh its merits/advantages。
          第三段:观点总结
          the problem of doing big things firstly mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if measures should be adopted before the thing get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent. It is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to let young men know the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big .With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future
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          To my way of thinking\From my perspective, The problem mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if we keep turning a blind eye and deaf ear to it。
          Measures should be adopted before things get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent.It is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to put an end to this situation.We should appeal to the relevant administration departments to strengthen supervision over.With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future
          总结:
          改作文中,第二段落内容容易较为单薄,故建议同学们将原模板的第三段内容中,我的观点写到第二段的结尾处,已调整三段之间比例。
          最后,还是那句话,我们不押题,我们只相信自己的实力!任你出题人几路来,我只一路前行,为了自己的未来!

         

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