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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese：
1)简单介绍个人情况
2)说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额
3)保证会合理利用贷款并表明还款的决心
A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan
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行文思路
本题属于情景式命题，要求写一封申请信。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：简单介绍自己的情况，表明写信目的：申请助学贷款;说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额;保证合理利用贷款并表明还款决心，最后表示感谢。
高分范文
A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan
Sep 12th, 2008
To whom it may concern,
I am a freshman of Lianhe University, [1]majoring in Applied Physics. I am writing in the hope that I may obtain a bank loan to support my study in Applied Physics for the following four years.
My parents are both laid-off workers, so it’s [2]beyond their power to finance me through the college education. [3]To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation. [4]Therefore, [5]with the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.
[6]I give you my promise that the loan would be used properly. [4]Meanwhile, I’ll [7]spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan. I would be greatly obliged if my application is granted. And I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely yours,
Song Xue
【亮点点评】
[1]“主修…”，现在分词作伴随状语。
[2]“超出…的能力范围”。
[3]“使事情更糟糕的是”。
[4]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
[5]“with+宾语+宾补”的独立结构。
[6]“我保证…”，that引导同位语从句。
[7]“不遗余力”。
佳句临摩
1.佳句：To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation.
临摩：令人更迷惑不解的是，很多飞机都从大海上离奇消失了。
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2.佳句：Therefore, the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.
临摩：由于周围交通不便利，人们只得步行回家。
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3.佳句：Meanwhile, I’ll spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan.
临摩：全国人民都不遗余力地支持北京举办奥运会。
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1.To make matters more puzzled, many planes disappeared uncannily from the sky above the sea.
2.There being no convenient traffic, people are forced to walk home.
3.All Chinese people spare no efforts in supporting Beijing’s hosting of the Olympic Games. |
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发表于 2016-7-11 20:40:51