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石雷鹏:2013.12四级写作“网络是否取代面对面交流”

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发表于 2016-7-11 18:15:03 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

                       

                       

       

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          本篇范文提醒各位几个值得探讨的关注点:
  1. 不描述图片是否扣分,本人认为不会扣分,因为试题未做要求,且题目已经把图片信息说的很详细。根据往年阅卷经验,没有硬性要求的应该不扣分。写了虽然多余,如果写的不错也不影响得分,如果描述出错了,就不好说了。
  2. 不写题目是否扣分:自我本人参加阅卷以来,从未见过因为不写题目被扣分的。相反,见过不好把题目写错了因此影响得分的。
  3. 字数问题:最好控制的要求之内,如超出,最好不超过太多,比如220是个上线。
  Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief account of the impact of the Internet on the way people communicate and then explain whether electronic communication can replace face-to-face contact. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.
       
       

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  (图片来源:网络;图片中文字信息:“Dear Andy, -How are you? Your mother and I are fine. We both miss you and hope you are doing well. We look forward to seeing you again the next time your computer crashes and you come down-stairs for something to eat. -----Love, Mom and Dad.)
  解析:
  个人认为,任何名师的总结和范文都有优点和瑕疵之处,因此不予评论。但按照题目要求写相应的内容应该是不变的法则。
  如考题英文指令部分翻译如下:“指令:在本部分,你有30分钟时间完成一篇基于以下图片的短文。你应该首先简要解释一下网络对于人们交流方式的影响然后解释电子交流是否会替代面对面交流。你应该写至少120词但不高于180词。”
  显然,首先的第一项要求写的内容是“网络对于人际交流的影响”,却非图画描述。之后,提出一个问题“电子交流是否会替代面对面交流”,考生需要自己给出观点。
  下面是使用所讲表达写的一篇简易范文,请参考。
  首段:图画联系主题(阐述网络对人际交流的影响)
  This simple but thought-provoking cartoon can be naturally associated with the impacts of Internet on interpersonal communication: Internet shortens distance in communication, but it causes/ leads interpersonal relationship to be indifferent/ cold/ alienated.
  二段:现象描述
  In contemporary society, it has become a trend for individuals to communicate with each other via Internet. Meanwhile, an increasing number of youngsters find it rather convenient and efficient to keep online contact. However, it is Internet that does not enable individuals, teenagers in particular, to spend more time chatting face to face. A case in point is the guy and his parents in the picture: they seldom see each other and only when his computer crashes, will that guy come down-stairs for something to eat and have a face-to-face communication.
  尾段:观点+建议+号召(回答试题核心问题)
  As a youngster, I am convinced that it is of great necessity for us to enhance/ strengthen/ promote communication in real life. Accordingly, we should educate, advocate and encourage our friends, classmates and acquaintances to refuse addition to Internet. Do bear in mind: electronic communication can never replace face-to-face contact. (173词)
       
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