高考英语作文范文：介绍中国传统节日—中秋节

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　　例文：
        　　—个英文网站面向中学生征稿请你写一篇英语稿件，介绍“中秋节”及这个节日里的主要活动。
        　　1. 写作要点：它是中国的传统节日之一;
        　　2. 家人团聚;
        　　3. 赏月、吃月饼;
        　　4. 还有旅游、访友等其他活动。
        　　注意：1.词数100左右;
        　　2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯;
        　　3. 开头语已为你写好，不计入总词数。
        　　【参考范文】
        　　The Mid-Autumn Festival
        　　The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th of the eighth month of our
Chinese lunarcalendar. As one of the traditional Chinese festivals, it has been
enjoying great popularity in our country. Usually, no matter how far away or how
busy we are, we will try to come home for the celebration. The moon that night
looks the brightest in the whole lunar month. What we love most is the time we
enjoy the full moon together. With the beautiful moon up in the sky, we sit
togetherand eat moon cakes and fruit, sharing our stories. In addition to these
traditional activities, we have a wider range of choices such as travelling
andvisiting our relatives or friends。
        　　老师点评：
        　　任务达成：完整完成了介绍中秋节的任务，覆盖了所有内容。
        　　单 词：使用广泛的词汇来表达，其中有fall on, lunar calendar, enjoy great popularity,
celebration, in addition, tradictional,range, relative等高级词汇。
        　　语法结构：使用了多种多样的语法结构，有as+名词作状语的结构，有has been enjoying现在完成进行时态， no
matter引导的让步状语从句，有what we love most的主语从句，和它后面的定语从句，with+名词的状语，-ing的非谓成分等等。
        　　连 接: 使用了一些连接词汇或短语： As, Usually,in addition
to，但是整体的行文推进还不够流畅，没有分段，句与句之间的连接不够自然，扣1分。
        　　整体得分：24-25分。
        　　修改后
        　　The Mid-Autumn Festival
        　　TheMid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th of the eighth month of our Chinese
lunarcalendar. As one of the traditional Chinese festivals, it has been enjoying
great popularity for its celebration of family reunion(增加此项内容，使得后面的句子连起来更自然).
Usually,no matter how far away or how busy we are, we will try to come home for
the festival. The moon thatnight looks the brightest in the whole lunar
month(此句是好句，但是放在此处，稍显突兀，所以可以考虑放到后面).
        　　(另起一段，讲节日的庆祝方式)
        　　What we love most in the festival(连接上面的段落) is the time we get together to
enjoy the full moon, which looks the brightest in the whole lunar
month(把第一段最后一句移到此处). With the beautiful moon up in the sky, we sit together and
eat moon cakes and fruit,sharing our stories. In addition to these traditional
activities, we have a wider range of choices such as travelling and visiting our
relatives or friends。