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Dear Bob,
Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.
I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It
is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and
a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house
is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.
Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11
bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will
you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the
airport, see you.
Best wishes !
Yours,
Li Hua
满分理由
本文格式正确，内容完整，表述清楚，衔接紧密流畅，时态语态使用准确，特别是结尾末段适度的发挥，既充实了内容，又符合逻辑，成为本文与众不同的亮点。
Dear Bob,
How are you these days?
I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn Chinese. You
asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty
good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s
just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.
There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is
not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the
rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find
another place for you.
Yours,
Li Hua
满分理由
本文内在逻辑性很强，由远及近。由外及内，层次分明，错落有致。同时让步状语从句运用得恰到好处，很出彩，再则结构完整，从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备。
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发表于 2016-7-10 16:19:40