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发表于 2016-7-10 16:03:01 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  题目:请以“Hot spring Let Me Have A Rest”为题,写一篇不少于60个单词的作文。
  Hot spring Let Me Have A Rest
  温泉让我得到休息
  We took off our coats and ran quickly into the lemon spring. When I first put my feet into the water. I cried out, "Wow, it is hot!" I didn't know the water was so hot, and I was a little afraid that it would burn me...So I walked carefully into the spring. One step,two... I felt the heat slowly climbing up my body.
  我们脱下外套,快速奔向柠檬泉,当我第一次把脚伸进水中时,我大声喊道:“哇,水是热的!”我一开始不知道水如此热,所以我有点儿担心会被热水烫到。于是,我小心翼翼地走进温泉,一步,两步......我能感觉到热量慢慢地进入我的身体。
  点评:要写出生动有趣的事,除了把事情的来龙去脉说清楚,还一定要注意增加文章的细节,这是必不可少的,丰富的细节描写能为你的文章增色不少,使人读起来具有一种身临其境的感觉。另外,本篇时态运用十分得当,整篇文章的动词过去时一脉相承。
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