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托福写作高分范文:改变家乡你打算做什么

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发表于 2016-7-10 15:24:40 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you
change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
          写作思路:
          一个重要的改变就是改变环境,让它变的更好
          (1)环境好能改善人的身体健康,很多人因为环境而生病
          (2)环境好了,吸引更多的游客来旅游
          (3)环境好能够促进经济发展,吸引更多的商人来投资
          参考范文:
          If I could change one thing about my hometown, I think it would be the fact
that there's no sense of community here. People don't feel connected, they don't
look out for each other, and they don't get to know their neighbors.
          People come and go a lot here. They change jobs frequently and move on.
This means that they don't put down roots in the community. They don't join
community organizations and they're not willing to get involved in trying to
improve the quality of life. If someone has a petition to put in a new street
light, she has a very hard time getting a lot of people to sign. They don't feel
it has anything to do with them. They don't get involved in improving the
schools because they don't think the quality of education is important to their
lives. They don't see the connection between themselves and the rest of their
community.
          People don't try to support others around them. They don't keep a friendly
eyes on their children, or check in on older folks if they don't see them for a
few days. They're not aware when people around them may be going through a hard
time. For example, they may not know if a neighbor loses a loved one. There's
not a lot of community support for individuals.
          Neighbors don't get to know each other. Again, this is because people come
and go within a few years. So when neighbors go on vacation, no one is keeping
an eye on their house. No one is making sure nothing suspicious is going on
there, like lights in the middle of the night. When neighbors' children are
cutting across someone's lawn on their bikes, there's no friendly way of
casually mentioning the problem. People immediately act as if it's a major
property disagreement.
          My hometown is a nice place to live in many ways, but it would be much nice
if we had that sense of community.
          
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