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发表于 2016-7-10 15:24:38 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  Introduction (56 words)
          Since the discovery of tobacco related to a number of health problems, an
increasing number of people have called for prohibiting smoking. It is
undeniable that still a considerable amount of smokers exist in this world. I
would like to examine the advantages and disadvantages of smoking cigarettes as
following and then offer my own opinion.
          Body1(95words)
          There are some advantages to taking tobacco.(topic sentence) First, tobacco
industry contributes a great proportion of revenue to the nation. Extremely high
taxation imposed on tobacco yielding and cigarette manufacturing has released
the financial burden for both the government and the individual taxpayer
generation by generation. Second, the soothing effects of smoking has been
confirmed by ordinary smokers; particularly those who have hard-brain-working
jobs are in favor of it; they claim that smoking cigarettes can make them calm
and stimulate brain cells to work more efficiently. Finally, cigarettes play an
important role in social activities.
          Body2 (106words)
          On the other hand, smoking demonstrates numerous negative effects.(topic
sentence) Initially, nicotine may bring takers a number of diseases. Second-hand
smoking also does harm to your health. Moreover, hatred from non-smokers always
grow against smokers hence some conflicts arise frequently. We then look at the
statistics showing that thousands of fire accidents worldwide occur each year
due to the litter of non-extinguished cigarette ends, not to mention the related
deaths and losses. Last but not least, expenses have to be taken into
consideration. Fine cigarettes are not cheap. If you get addicted to them, your
daily amount of cigarette consumption will increase inevitably, emptying your
pocket money.
          Conclusion(88words)
          After all, so far no direct evidence has been provided that smoking can
definitely result in takers' death of lung cancer, and those fire accidents are
the result of carelessness or irresponsibility of the smokers, not tobacco to be
laid blames. Also, spending pocket money can never be considered as a financial
burden. In addition, I suggest more restricted smoking areas be planned so as
not to violate non-smokers' rights. After weighing the pros and cons of using
tobacco, I, for one, am against the act to ban smoking.
          
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