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雅思写作高分范文:穷人的孩子早当家

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发表于 2016-7-10 15:24:17 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  Children who grow up in families without large amounts of money are better
prepared to deal with problems in their adult life than children who are brought
up by wealthy parents. Do you agree or disagree?
          题目点评:这道题是IELTS writing task
2当中比较少见的“看着容易写好太难”的题目(很多IELTS作文题目看起来很难,写好却不一定特别难)。咱们首先要注意区别“families without
large amounts of money”和“poor families”这两个概念的差异,前者不仅仅指“low-income families”还要包括
“middle-income
families”,所以题目的意思和一些同学概括的“穷人的孩子早当家”不同;另外一个误区在于因为这道题目和中国文化比较贴近,很多同学会举过多的简单生活事例但是却忽视了普遍性推理,导致论证缺乏深度。7月份写作变题之后GZ的判分明显不如以前严格,所以估计这次打分也会放松,但是我们在准备写作考试的时候不应该降低对自己的要求。
          从论点上看,考虑到多数考生更熟悉中国的国情,肯定是totally
agree更好写,布什的内阁里面现在也有拉洋板儿车出身的(不过在美国富豪的孩子当中牛人还是出了不少,四十三位总统里面也有大量富家子弟,从整体上看在西方有钱的家长更舍得让自己的孩子经历风雨)。既然观点写一边倒,那么结构当然就是五段式——开头段转述题目
主旨句,主体段1讲一般家庭的孩子比富家孩子有更强的心理承受能力,主体段2讲一般家庭的孩子有更强的独立性,主体段3讲普通家庭的家长对小孩的要求往往更严格,结尾段总结上文三层意思。
thesis statement和topic sentences(范文里用横线标明)要是少了,扣分没商量哦!
          关键词:income gaps 指收入差距 income inequality 指收入不均 intergenerational两代人之间的 turn
the tables 是个idiom,有点像中文说的“打翻身仗” offspring 孩子counterpart 相对应的人(或事物)meritocratic
society 说白了就是“凭本事吃饭的社会” self-restraint 自制能力infancy 婴儿期frugality勤俭 financial
strains 说白了就是缺钱,名词 well-off / affluent(adj) / well-to-do/ well-heeled / wealthy
都是有钱的意思,实在弹尽粮绝了还可以再用一个moneyed(adj), autonomy 自己管理自己,名词 initiative 主动性
well-acquainted 对某事很熟悉,mitigate缓解,要说解决问题,雅思里面词汇也特多tackle / address / solve /
resolve / grapple with / combat 再加题目里的deal with,大家自己挑着用啦
          It is widely accepted that we have been living in a “the rich get richer
whereas the poor get poorer” age in terms of income gaps within a generation.
However , to this day, there has been no consensus yet over the extent to which
income inequality is intergenerational. Some contend that the offspring of
low-income and middle-income parents can largely grow up to manifest better
problem-solving abilities during adulthood than their high-income family
counterparts, thereby turning the tables socially and financially. Personally, I
believe this is generally the case in any meritocratic society.
          First and foremost, children raised in households not in possession of a
good fortune are conditioned early on in their lives to exercise self-control
and self-restraint. These individuals learn from their infancy onward that not
everything they crave will become theirs instantaneously. Every so often their
wishes go beyond their parents' means and they have to come to terms with the
resulting sense of frustration or rejection. Throughout the childhood and early
adulthood years they are tempered by the repeated experiences of parents’ denial
of their requests and frugality is inculcated into their minds as a virtue.
Consequently these children, for the most part, are apt to interpret scrimping
and saving, emotional uneasiness, not infrequent financial strains and menial
first jobs as an integral part of life rather than a devastating ordeal. Hence
they end up being better able to manage stress in their adult years and less
likely to panic or get daunted when problems occur.
          Further, children brought up by parents of low or middle economic status
often grow up to be physically, mentally and professionally more independent
than children brought up by affluent parents. It goes without saying that
children whose parents are not particularly well-off are more likely than
children of affluent households to know how to get the most out of a modest
allowance, if they ever get such a thing at all. To the former group of
children, most desirable things in life have to be “earned”—that is, more often
than not they must put forth great effort before their desire is fulfilled. On
the other hand, busy, low or medium salaried parents translate into more
autonomy and initiative on the children's part. This originally disadvantaged
group becomes spontaneous and handy through crafting toys on their own,
resourceful by cooking their own meals, tactful with coaxing their parents into
buying them gifts, intelligent thanks to the absence of private tutors, savvy in
doing summer jobs, and above all, unrelenting in pursuing their dreams.
          Lastly, non-wealthy parents typically have higher and more definite
aspirations for their children than well-to-do parents. Well-acquainted with all
the disadvantages a meager or fair-to-middling bank account generates, many
non-wealthy parents pin their hopes on their children to get their families
upwardly mobile. These adults mostly have high behavioral, educational and
(subsequently) occupational expectations for their children. As a result, they
cannot afford to be permissive parents. Spoiling their offspring rotten is the
last thing they care to do and they are always ready to discipline their
children when they misbehave. They keep tabs on their children's grades at
school and do not spare the rod when their offspring do not measure up
academically. The odds of children raised in such rigorous environments having
good problem-solving skills are apparently better than children raised
otherwise.
          To conclude, the chief determinant of individuals' problem-solving skills
is not the amount of money their parents can amass when they are little. Rather,
hands-on experience in comprehending, analyzing, resolving ,mitigating or
circumventing problems is more essential to the cultivation of problem-solving
abilities. Hence, I am convinced that families without great wealth are more
advantageous to the development of individual capacity to tackle problems.
          
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