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高分关键词：
car ownership汽车占有量
incidence 发生率
car wrecks
撞车 perpetrators 肇事者
stiff punishment/severe punishment/ harsh penalty 严厉的惩罚
halt/curb 遏制
rampant 猖獗的
apprehensive 形容词，对……有所顾忌的
surveillance camera 监控摄像头
promulgate 颁布(法令)
hazard (危险)
forestall=prevent 预防
pedestrian 行人
jaywalk 违章横穿马路
circumvent 规避
the law enforcement执法(部门)
draconian(法律)严厉的
lax (法律)松懈的
The soaring car ownership in China has thrown the issue of traffic
accidents into sharp relief. According to recent research conducted by China's
Ministry of Transportation， the annual incidence of car wrecks is nearly three
times as high as the corresponding figure a decade ago. Many people have been
alarmed by this trend and assert that imposing stiffer punishment on the
perpetrators is the only effective way to curb this disturbing phenomenon.
Speaking for myself， I tend to believe their view has both merit and
demerit.
Granted， more severe penalty does carry certain advantages in halting the
rampant driving offenses on the roads. First and foremost ，it would be the most
cost-effective way to deter those would-be driving offenders. Heavy fines， long
community service or even jail terms would render most of the aggressive drivers
apprehensive about violating the traffic law， even without extra government
funding to upgrade traffic surveillance cameras or augment traffic police force.
Further， the effect of this hardline approach would be immediate. Once the
related law is promulgated， we would be sure to witness a substantial decline in
driving offenses overnight.
However， there are also traffic hazards that we cannot forestall by merely
stiffening the punishment of aggressive or destructive driving conduct. To begin
with， pedestrians who habitually jaywalk will not be discouraged by this move.
Pedestrians account for a considerable proportion of traffic-accident culprits.
Thus， pedestrian offenses such as jaywalking must be effectively checked as
well. Secondly， if people who are regularly behind the wheel are not awakened to
the horrific perils traffic offenses may breed ， some of them will exploit every
possibility to circumvent the law enforcement capability. If people abide by the
traffic law solely out of fear for punishment， when a surveillance camera is out
of order or the traffic police fail to keep tabs on a specific section of a
freeway， all hell would break loose. Lastly， strict punishment of disorderly
driving conduct does not guarantee infallible detection of driving offenses.
Without sophisticated traffic-offense detecting apparatuses and an alert traffic
police force， traffic laws， no matter how draconian， would be lax enough for
hardened reckless drivers to disregard.
In the final analysis， I concede that harsh penalty for driving offenders
constitutes an effective way to deter irresponsible driving behavi123 However，
the growing trend of flagrant driving offenses cannot be halted by stiffer
punishment of driving offenders alone. Hence we must take a more integrated
approach to this modern-day scourge， possibly including equally heavy punishment
for pedestrian offenses， the heightening of people's awareness about the
horrific consequences of reckless driving and the advancement of traffic offense
detectors and more capable traffic law enforcement forces
发表于 2016-7-10 15:24:16