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雅思写作辅导:2012年1月7日雅思A类大作文高分范文

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  Some people think developing countries should invite large foreign
companies to open offices and factories to grow their economies. Others think
the developing countries should keep large companies out and develop local
companies instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
          谢振礼小笔记:
          ——来自国际的投资意味利弊的冲突。作者的立场是开发中国家必须引进外资。这是主题。把冲突抽象化作为焦点。这是起段开头。
          ——试题明白的指示考生讨论不同的两种立场。承段接头论外资的好处。转段转头论外资可能引起的弊病。
          ——合段回头重申起段的主题大意。
          ——谢振礼老师的老花招之一是把抽象的冲突搞抽象化,也用具体的事物抽象化使用。文中所用的简单名词如--门,种子,植物,果实,花园,树木,笑脸,甚至又龙又虎--一系列的抽象使用。写作时如果采用抽象的概念或典故,会比较有话说。比方说,孔夫子论做学问,比喻为逆水行舟。有人比喻常胜将军打败仗为惨遭滑铁卢。无辜受罪等于是被钉在十字架上。可不都是抽象比喻?悟其禅?
          ——结尾段的种子,果实,花园的比喻来自圣经: 创世纪 Genesis
          ——【隐形模板】如果没有别人试用,谢振礼老师留来自己用。利用18句【起3承6转6合3】的圆形逻辑,或者其它自定的模板,有利于避免跑题,争取速度。句子写多了,时间不足。写少了,怕是字数不够。
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          Created by Jeenn Lee Hsieh
          In order to let cash flow in, the door must be open. There is an increased
awareness among developing countries that they cannot reach their expected
economic potentials without attracting equity along with management support from
large foreign companies. On the contrary, to keep foreign offices and factories
out is to deny the need to court international money which can help plant
entrepreneurial seeds for the local economy to grow.
          For a developing country, little choice is seen but turn to foreign
capitals. Over the past decades many developing countries have sought outside
investments in what is called a win-win game benefitting foreign companies as
well. The trend of such bilateral cooperation has become even more obvious in a
world of globalization. Plenty of economic fruits are being shared by investing
companies and local industries alike, and this can be proved by such succesful
stories as Asian "dragons" or "tigers," big and small, and the smiling faces of
capitalists, far and near. Thanks greatly to foreign offices and factories, the
host nations and regions can long enjoy supercharged economic growth based
largely on industrial policies supporting exports to rich, industrialized
countries. Furthermore, economic prosperity leads to heavy government
investments in education and high public and private saving rates, among other
benefits.
          There is a sense of fear in some people who argue that international
investments could backfire in the long run. It is understandable that the policy
to keep foreign offices and factories out is not so much a fear of foreign
capital as a fear of foreign dominance. Although a developing country is in want
of cash to grow its economy faster, it happens that money can just as well ruin
national character. As investors search the planet for the highest returns, they
are often drawn to places endowed with bountiful natural resources like timbers
and mines, particularly where there are weak or ineffective laws or corruptions.
Foreign investment-fed growth also promotes western-style consumerism, boosting
car ownership, and Big Mac consumption rates towards levels beyond control. Deep
at ideological heart, some developing countries have tried to restrict, even
resist, foreign investments because of nationalist sentiments and concerns over
economic and political influences.
          In comparison, it is advisable for a developing country to carefully study
where investments come from, as if selecting seeds for plants. The wise words of
Genesis encourage people to select "every plant yielding seed and every tree
which has fruit yielding seed." Good foreign investments may be like good seeds
that grow good plants that bear good fruits that in turn yield good seeds. It is
up to a developing country whether to keep its garden open to foreign seeds.
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