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With the development of society, students today can receive a more pleasant
education than before. School can offer a variety of courses to students, such
as physical education, philosophy, math, English, geography, physics and
history. Of all these subjects, I suppose physical education is the most
essential one, while philosophy is the least.
Physical education, as the most indispensable course, has a strong
influence on students’ health, study and communication. First of all, physical
education will make students more active in sports which can keep their body
strong and fit. Whoever takes physical education will spend more time in (or
engage more in) sport activities such as playing basketball, running, swimming
and so on which can accelerate their blood circulation, strengthen the immune
system and keep them energetic. Besides, it will also benefit students’ mental
health as it can assist them with motor abreaction. Secondly, physical education
can indirectly conduce to students’ study. It is apparent that those who have a
healthy body have enough energy to study well(effectively). Finally, physical
education can provide students with chances to make friends with others who also
like sports. Those who are fond of playing basketball would be together
frequently, talking about NBA. This enables them to have better communicative
and interpersonal skills.
Philosophy which I consider to be the least crucial course is not practical
for students. As the world is developing, high income is necessary for people to
satisfy their needs in life. However, philosophy cannot help students learn
survival skills. In other words, learning philosophy cannot make a living
(provide a better living). Moreover, students who learn philosophy may have few
students?(friends?) who share the same major with them in real life as
philosophy is so abstract that it is too difficult to learn.
In conclusion, physical education is the most critical course while
philosophy is the least significant one. Physical education help students become
healthy, study well and make more friends. On the hand, philosophy is boring and
cannot help students bring home the bacon.
I am so glad to read your writing. You have excellent organization and
reasoning! I did not necessarily need to revise that much, but to help you write
better, I changed a few phrases. There are some minor errors in your writing
which do not interfere with the meaning and the examiner may never discover
them. 蓝色是我的评语。写的不错的一篇文章，感谢周同学提供。 |
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发表于 2016-7-10 15:18:54