雅思作文7分范文：幸福取决于什么

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　　2012年10月11日雅思考试作文：
        　　Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on health. Discuss both of the views and give your own opinion.幸福和经济成功关联，幸福来自健康，讨论再结论？
         
       
                写作步骤：
       
       
                　　1. 词汇替换
       
       
                　　2. 主题观点
       
       
                　　3. 思路拓展
       
       
                　　4. 正文写作
       
       
                　　5. 仔细检查
       
       
                雅思小鹏哥布局图：
       
       
                　　首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 +作家立场
       
       
                　　二段：正方观点的展开：两个论据以及细节的展开
       
       
                　　三段：反方观点的展开：三个论据以及细节的展开
       
       
                　　尾段：亮明观点+总结理由：
       
       
                 主题观点：确实，经济成功可以带来幸福，但是，幸福其实与更加重要的元素健康紧密管理：
       
       
                思路拓展：
       
       
                　　正方观点：金钱为何是幸福的源泉；（1）金钱可以使的人的生活自由，舒适以及帮助人去实现诸多的梦想例如：环游世界旅行，接受最好的教育。（2）另外，大量的财富是社会资源的象征，可以赢得别人的尊敬以及羡慕，可以带来成就感。
       
       
                　　反方观点：（1）健康是幸福生活的源泉，失去健康，拥有再多的财富，名声和地位都是没有任何意义的。生活中很多的例子，企业家富可敌国，但是，健康每况愈下，身体的负担带来心灵的压力，他们很难幸福。（2）有了健康的保障，人会更加容易事业成功家庭幸福，因为健康可以使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。（3）一个身心健康的人一定是一个乐观自信的人，他开朗的性格会帮助他扩大交友圈，好友的增加自然带来生活的乐趣。
       
       
                语料库建设：
       
       
                　　1. happiness = sense of happiness 幸福
       
       
                　　2. happiness = well-being = pleasure 快乐
       
       
                　　3. economic success = economic achievement = have large sums of money = own a great deal of wealth = have deep pockets = have money to burn 财力雄厚
       
       
                　　4. Happiness lies, first of all, in health. 健康是幸福生活的本源；
       
       
                　　5. Health enables one to brave the career challenges energetically and harmonize the family life optimistically健康可以使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐；
       
       
                　　6. Under no circumstances can ignore the immense value of health management. 任何情况下不能忽视健康管理的巨大价值。
       
       
                　　7. Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers.健康对于一个人如同水对于鱼儿。
       
       
                　　8. is closely related to = is associated with 和……相关
       
       
                　　9. have little correlation to 不相关联
       
       
                　　10. happiness index 幸福指数
       
       
               
                        范文语料库背诵：
               
               
                        　　1. There is a heated discussion as to whether or not （很土的写法——不推荐）
               
               
                        　　2. Perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate as to whether or not也许没有什么像……一样引起无休止的争论；（推荐写法）
               
               
                        　　3. Standards towards …… differ widely from person to person.人们对于……的标准是仁者见仁智者见智
               
               
                        　　4. This essay aims to analyze this hot issue from diverse angle and then voice my opinion 本文讨论这个争议的话题从不同角度再得出我的结论
               
               
                        　　5. wholesome physique and mentality 健康的身心；
               
            
            

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                                新东方薛鹏原创范文赏析：
                       
                       
                                　　首段：背景 + 争议 +目的
                       
Happinessis to a person what perfume is to flowers. The topic concerning personal happiness can never fail to appeal to us. Perhaps no issue has led to such an end less debate as to whether or not large sums of money could directly bring people well-being. Standards towards happiness differ widely from person to person. This essay aims to analyze this hot issue from diverse angles and then voice my opinion
                       
                                　　二段：正方观点的展开：
                       
Indeed, happiness do closely relate to economic achievement to some extent because a great amount of wealth can make people’s life more enjoyable, comfortable and free.To be more specific, one can fulfill his many dreams such as receiving fine education and traveling around the globe if he or she has deep pocket.Still, economic success implies high social status, which can bring people the sense of happiness and even earn respect from others.
                       
                                　　三段：反方观点的展开：三个论据：
                       
Notwithstanding all that, there are still many opposite arguments maintaining that there is little correlation between the amount of one’s wealth and his or her happiness index. Happiness does not depend on economic success but completely on wholesome physique and mentality. First, happiness lies, first of all, in health. More precisely, wealth, fame, or status will be of little meaning if one fails to ensure his health. To illustrate, some affluent enterprisers have money to burn, yet, they are basically unhappy due to the deteriorating health condition and huge mental pressure.Further, health ensures career success and family happiness. In other words, health enables one to brave the career challenges energetically and harmonize the family life optimistically. Ultimately, those who enjoy good health must be confident and optimistic, their pleasant characters can help them enlarge circle of friends. The multiplication of close friends will brighten their spirit and sweeten their lives.
                       
                                　　尾段：亮明观点+总结理由
                       
In the final analysis, there are some merits to both arguments. Speaking for myself, happiness is not only related to economic success but also links to health, which is more significant. Only by means of owing desirable health condition can we enjoy the lifelong sense of pleasure. (347)