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雅思写作辅导:避免10大"见官死"开头

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发表于 2016-7-10 15:21:07 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  "见官死"开头之一:废话连篇不知所云(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
          典型失败案例: Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?
          This topic is very interesting. I'm very interested in talking about this
topic. Because I'm also a college student and I'm not married...
          修改方案:开门见山 直奔主题
          In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to
get married.
          Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book
or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真题)
          Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have
a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to
read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more
important in our daily life.
          Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection
          Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn't it? Of course! It's really
very very important!
          "见官死"开头之二:中式英文 人见人晕(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆☆)
          典型失败案例:Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
          In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower
opened angrily...
          Topic 2- The population problem
          The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city
centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
          Topic3- Is there fairness in today's business world?
          I think in today's society, there is no fairness in the business world. For
example, I always chopped when I go out buy things...
          Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
          Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do
bad things, he will get "baoying".
          "见官死"开头之三:观点模糊 态度暧昧(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
          典型失败案例: Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
          I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little,
only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me...
          "见官死"开头之四:偏离主题 无轨电车(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆)
          典型失败案例:Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the
qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To
what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)
          I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have
these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English,
music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our
friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
          "见官死"开头之五:语法错误 惨不忍睹(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
          典型失败案例:Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept
responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)
          About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are
not right. Because teach child is parent's responsibility. So we also punish
parents too besides children is also should.
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