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中国人写的雅思作文有结构但语言不够地道;native speaker写的文章够地道，但不够雅思!因此，市面上总找不到“完美”的雅思例文。
此次，我特别邀请我的美国朋友(同样研究和教授雅思)“按照我的要求”写了一些文章，这里逐一贴出来，让大家分享一下，呵呵。
Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better
prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought
up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to
deal with difficulties posed by the ‘real world’ when they grow up and they also
believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with
these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem
self-evident, but in fact require closer examination. ( 58words )
点评： 1+ 1 ’ 模式，最后 1
句为主题句。此段的主题句稍微有点特殊，它的确否定了前面所提到的观点，从而表达出了自己的观点，此外还引出了下文。特别是最后半句： but in fact
require closer examination ，感觉是在抛砖引玉。
The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the
value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching moneywhen
times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families,
thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely
ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their
youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They
are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This
belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education.
(100words)
点评： 1 ’ +3 模式，第 1 句是主题句。请注意，从此段的内容来看，这是个让步段(即分析自己并不赞成的观点)。虽然 4
段论的作文的主体段是两面讨论，但是本人还是喜欢这样的写作，即主体段的观点还是有侧重的，把让步段放在前面，最后 1
句话引出下一段，这样过度地很自然，而且自己的观点也比较明确! |
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发表于 2016-7-10 15:19:29