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发表于 2016-7-10 15:15:40 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
  作为最经典的雅思复习资料,剑桥系列在作文部分一直以来都有一个重大的不足:范文不全-只有一部分的作文在书的最后部分提供了考官写的高分范文,相当一部分的topic后面只有考生写的,分数也各不相同的“参考文章”-大部份还都是低分“范文”。像剑6当中A类第二套试卷的小作文(剑6的52页),很经典的一个table题,可惜后面只有一篇考生写的相当平庸的6分“范文”,明显缺乏学习研究的价值。在此Akata帮大家搜罗了两篇这个表格题的范文。
          The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
       

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                  The table indicates the number of miles by the average English person in 1985 and 2000, using various means of transport.
       
       
                  The number of miles walked, cycled and travelled by local bus all decreased. Of these, the number of miles travelled by local bus decreased the most, from 429 miles in 1985 to 274 miles in 2000.
       
       
                  The number of miles travelled by car, long distance bus, train and taxi all increased.
       
       
                  The number of miles driven by car was 3,199 in 1985 and rose by 50% to 4,806 in 2000. The number of miles travelled by long distance bus more than doubled from 54 miles(1985)to 124 miles (2000). The number of miles driven by taxi trebled from 13 miles(1985) to 42 miles (2000). The use of other, unspecified, forms of transport also increased.
       
       
                  Overall, the number of miles travelled by the average English person rose from 4,740 miles in 1985 to 6,475 miles in 2000, with the increase of cars accounting for almost all of that increase. (173 words)
       
       
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                  The table demonstrates how different modes of travel changed in England in 15 years spanning from 1985 to 2000. In general, the modes are classified into two kinds in terms of average miles travelled per person per year: one enjoyed rising popularity while the other decreasing.
       
       
                  The travel modes which gained popularity in the period included cars, long distance buses, trains, taxis and others. Cars remained top among the modes in the 15 years, with its average miles increasing considerably from 3,199 in 1985 to 4,806 in 2000. Long distance buses and taxis seemed to be warmly welcomed by travelers, so average miles travelled in the two modes almost tripled.
       
       
                  Travels by walking, bicycles and local buses lost travelers’ favor in the one and a half decade. Average travelling distance by local buses suffered the biggest decrease, dropping from 429 to 274, whilst the number of miles by walking and bikes fell mildly from 255 to 237 and from 51 to 41 respectively. Despite the decreases, however, the total miles travelled grew from 4,740 to 6,475.
       
            
            
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                  In brief, the total travelling distance in the country grew in 15 years when cars, long distance buses, trains, taxis and other modes of travel were more popular and walking, bicycling and local transportation less popular. (212 words)
       
       
                  这两篇范文出自不同作者之手,总体都属于高分范文,但其实亮相比照之下质量还是有明显高下的。
       
       
                  这里正好来考考各位烤鸭的判断力-你真的清楚到底怎么样的作文才能在雅思考试当中获得8分以上的超高分吗?
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