【英语四级六级作文训练营】改词扩句(第二期)

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        这个系列来自沪江部落“四六级作文训练营：改词扩句”，本节目适合备考英语四级和英语六级的朋友，以及有志于提高英语写作水平的朋友，旨在帮助大家写英文作文时，用语更加地道和规范。
        本期主要讲分词做插入语的效果。
        例句：
        You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.
        改句：
        You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.
        解析：我们可以看到例句中有3个简单句，咋看上去给人一种啰嗦、累赘的感觉。但细看之下，不难发现3个句子的主语全部是you，因此我们就该联想到同位语、插入语的应用。从改句中，我们可以发现谓语从原来的3个变成了1个，顿时使句子显得高级，精简很多。其次，还有一个改动之处为"good"，这个词是常用词，口语中用的更频繁些，我们可以想一些同义词例如"excellent"，"outstanding"等等。
        下面请大家试试看吧！
        1.He depended on his families' support to find a good job. One of his friends looked downed on him.
       
        答案：
        Depending on his families' support, he found a decent a job, which was despised by one of his friends.
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