英语自学网 发表于 2016-7-11 20:42:36

2012年12月英语四六级写作技巧之少用关系代词

  Where possible, reduce the use of "which," "who" "that" "whom" "whether... or not" etc.
          少用关系代词
          学会运用关系代词是你学习英文过程中的一个重要的阶段。学会少用它们则表明你取得了更大的进步。在校对你的作品时,仔细检查一下所有的which’s, who’s that’s和whom’s是否必要。删除不必要的关系代词会使你的文章更精彩。
           Example:
          Unnecessary: It is a truth that is universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.
           (用两个 that’s,读起来很别扭)
          Better: It is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.
          -- Jane Austin
          注:被动语态修饰的名词通常不须用关系代词。
          Unnecessary: In 1970 India dedicated a nuclear power plant near Bombay, which was built with American assistance.
          Improved: In 1970 India dedicated a nuclear power plant near Bombay, built with American assistance.
          Unnecessary: During this period, Churchill spoke for a nation which was undivided and curiously happy, as it has never been in my lifetime, before or since.
          Improved: During this period, Churchill spoke for a nation undivided and curiously happy, as it has never been in my lifetime, before or since.
          Unnecessary: Justice theories have a long tradition, which goes back to Plato and Aristotle in the 5th century B.C.
          Improved: Justice theories have a long tradition, going back to Plato and Aristotle in the 5th century B.C.
          Unnecessary: Shirley Temple’s father blew nearly the entire $3 million that she made by tap dancing which made her famous in the movies.
          Improved: Shirley Temple’s father blew nearly the entire $3 million she made tap dancing her way to fame in the movies.
          Unnecessary: We told them they were the victims who deserved sympathy the most.
          Improved: We told them they were the victims, most deserving of sympathy.
          Unnecessary: Only a person who is oblivious* to the facts of modern life would doubt the need of vocational education today.
          Better: Only a person oblivious to the facts of modern life would doubt the need of vocational education today.
          Unnecessary: Not everyone in North America likes the taste of green tea, whether it contains caffeine or not.
          Better: With or without caffeine, not everyone in North America likes the taste of green tea.
          Unnecessary: Usually the Washington family married people who were socially better off than themselves, but the second marriage of George’s father was an exception.
          Better: Usually the Washingtons married their social betters, but the second marriage of George’s father was an exception.
          Unnecessary: In some instances, a letter can take ten days by air and six to eight weeks by ship to reach the person to whom the letter is addressed.
            
            

enthree 发表于 2016-7-11 21:40:08

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          Better: In some instances, a letter can take ten days by air and six to eight weeks by ship to reach its intended receiver.
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