英语自学网 发表于 2016-7-10 14:42:13

托福作文指导:别让你的一流论证沦落二流分数

  托福写作强调逻辑和论证,以整体来评分。但有些同学在平常学习中单单注意逻辑和论证,往往忽视了语言方面的雕琢,考场上在语言方面疏漏多多,那样即便你的思路和论证属于一流,最多也只能得个二流分数。小编为您整理托福写作中的七个语法错误,希望大家能规避这些错误。
          1. 用词不当
          原:The absence of groupwork is a disaster for teenagers in modern society.
          改:The absence of teamwork is a disaster for teenagers in modern society.
          评:groupwork是“分组”或者“小组集体任务”的意思。这位同学原本想说teamwork“团队合作”,却用了一个看起来很像,但实际完全不同的词,表达出来的意思就风马牛不相及了。
          原:You will be dangerous if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture.
          改:You will be in danger if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture.
          评:dangerous表示所修饰的对象是“带来危险的,有危险性的”,而be in danger才是“身处险境”的意思。到底谁才是威胁呢?
          原:Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned in class, might effect their further development.
          改:Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned in class, might affect their further development.
          评:模样长得像,意思可不同了。这里想用动词affect表示“影响”,却误写为名词effect“效果”,一字千里啊!
          2. 搭配错误
          原:Nowadays, people are crazy pursuing to be excellent.
          改:Nowadays, people are crazy about excellence.
          评:这位同学显然记错了be crazy about sth. 这个用法,写出来的句子自然会出问题啦。
          原:Besides, public speech can effectively increase your communication skills, which facilitate your salesman career.
          改:Besides, public speech can effectively improve your communication skills, which facilitate your salesman career.
          评:此处是一个明显的动宾搭配错误。“提高……技巧”应该是improve the skills,而不是increase the skills.
          3.词性错位
          原:I will forget my sad and pressure from the work and the study.
          改:I will forget my sadness and pressure from work and study.
          评:sad是形容词,而这里明显需要一个名词,应该是sadness。
          原:Although making money is a priority for most people, spending time with the family is equal significant.
          改: …, spending time with the family is equally significant.
          评:形容词significant前需要用副词来修饰,所以equal应该改成equally。
            
            

enfive 发表于 2016-7-10 14:58:06


          4. 时态混乱
          原:Although I have no work experience when I was a teenager, I always dreamed about having a job.
          改:Although I had no work experience when I was a teenager, I always dreamed about having a job.
          评:过去时的句子中冒出了现在时,同学你太粗心了,要仔细检查哦~
          原:I would explain my view in the following paragraphs.
          改:I’d like to explain… / I will explain…
          评:可能是两种说法记混了吧,结果把时态搞错了……
          5. 主谓不一致
          原:The way we deal with the environmental problems are crucial to the prosperity of human-being.
          改:The way we deal with the environmental problems is crucial to the prosperity of human-being.
          评:谓语之前有两个名词时,主谓搭配的问题就常常出现了。这里真正的主语应该是单数名词the way,所以与之搭配的谓语也应该是单数的is。
          6. 重复累赘
          原:From my point of view, I think this argument is quite limited since many other ways can also help learning a foreign country.
          改:From my point of view, this argument is quite limited since many other ways can also help us learn a foreign country.
          评:from my point of view和I think重复啦,保留一个就好。当然这里建议留下更“高级”的from my point of view.
          原:There are the majority of people who deem that they like to spend money on things which can bring them long memory.
          改:Majority of the people like to spend money on things that can be memorized for long.
          评:中文句式说的“有很多人……”,但别一看到“有”就非要用there be句型不可哦,直接摆出主谓宾就行了。
          “things that can be memorized for long”,被动语态明显更地道~
          7. 中式英语
          原:Thus, one is easier to draw bosses’ attention and gain appreciation.
          改:Thus, it’s easier for you to draw bosses’ attention and gain appreciation.
          评:中文习惯说“人们可以更容易地吸引老板的注意力”,而英语则习惯说“It’s easier for sb. to…”同学们要注意中英表述习惯的区别哦!
          托福写作中的语法错误是考生很难避免的一大难题,大家只能通过不断的练习和修改、分析来逐步提高,可以多看一些托福写作范文,积累相关句型和模板,以减少失误。
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